Sounds like you are well preparee already. I would like to suggeet a minor tweak called "setting a definite date" not just to the content of the two liner, but also to your mind set. So that would mean you say: Hey, I'm Fabs and I'd really like to get to know you and go out with you. And then not just leave the date for "someday" but to agree a time and place with her or ask if they have time now to do 😊

When I met my wife for the first time, we were having a lunch and it was not a date. I however asked there her out and we went for a dessert date...

If you want to explore that definite date concept more see How to be 3% man by Corey Wayne, recommended read.

Good luck!