You’re right much better. I just get kind of pissed when I see it so I’m trying moralize it.
Tbf I was going to add an “or, you don’t think your reader deserves better than a smart high schooler.” Still, moralizing.
I'm not quite sure yet, but when considering some of the literature I've been reviewing lately, specifically the Bhagavad-Gita and John Mill's "On Liberty," moralizing with the intent to inspire self-discovered and self-driven action might be morally correct. From the Bhagavad-Gita:
One should remember man's spirit as the guide, the primordial poet, smaller than an atom, granter of all things, in form inconceivable, the color of the sun beyond darkness.
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I'm certainly not above moralizing. I like your omitted addendum.
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