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My fifth graders’ compo exam is finally over! But I am already hard at work, crafting various intros based on the title and picture that appeared in their exam. I have insisted that the kiddos start their essay with dialogue. So, I ought to expose my better progress students to other ways of writing an introduction.
Start with a Sound Beep! The referee blew the whistle, and an exhilarating basketball match commenced to deafening cheers from the crowd. My heart was pounding like the rhythmic gong of a grandfather clock. My teammates and I were representing our school in the semi-finals against Innova Primary School. If we beat them, we would advance to the finals! However, little did I expect that I would make a costly mistake.
Start with Dialogue “Just what I’ve always wanted!” I shrieked excitedly, enveloping my mum in a tight embrace. I feasted my eyes on the latest edition of the iPad, its sleek features tugging at my heartstrings. Having this would surely make all my friends green with envy! Unfortunately, my joy was short-lived because I soon did something foolish — and paid a heavy price.
Start with a Question Have you ever committed a grave mistake and paid a heavy price for it? I was once the victim of my folly, and the lesson I learnt that day will forever be etched in my mind. It was undeniably an expensive lesson.
Start with a Quotation/Proverb Pride comes before a fall. Never have I appreciated the profound wisdom of this saying until I fractured my arm recently. I not only suffered excruciating pain, but also, missed out on a much-awaited opportunity. My pride caused me to incur an uninvited costly lesson.
Start with a Flashback “How can you forget?!” my mother chided my aunt sternly, her arms akimbo. I quivered nervously, wondering if their squabble would escalate into a full-blown argument. After all, this had happened before. My mind flashed back to the time when they had bickered fiercely with each other over a costly mistake my aunt had made.
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This made me think about how in started my Fiction Month Entry #1085995
Looks like I started it with dialogue, but actually really more of a sound, the sound of a news radio program droning on in the background
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I immediately had the same thought.
The goal is to hook the reader and convince them to keep on reading. If you've lost their attention then the game is up!
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What was the most effective intro you have ever read (and somehow stays etched in your mind)?
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It was a dark and stormy night ahaha
Jk, but "it was the best of times it was the worst of times" always stuck with me despite me not remembering much else about the book
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Omg that was the intro on my mind when I typed this question too!
Thing is, I can’t even remember another intro haha
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Once upon a time and a very good time it was there was a moocow coming down along the road and this moocow that was down along the road met a nicens little boy named baby tuckoo. . . . His father told him that story: his father looked at him through a glass: he had a hairy face.
I've always liked how A Portrait of the Artist as a Young Man by James Joyce opens, I think because it's loaded with details that leave me with questions.
You might put this one in your final category.
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Somehow this reminds me of the Red Wheelbarrow poem by William Carlo Williams
so much depends upon
a red wheel barrow
glazed with rain water
beside the white chickens
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So creative! I liked your word choices too, particularly reverie. I haven’t thought of this word for very long haha.
I wonder how you reconcile your creative mind with logical tendencies (economics proposal). Balancing the yin and yang, so to speak
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I guess you could call it "code switching"?
That's for the language that's used. But the creativity and the research imo flow from the same place, which is this curiosity about human behavior, and wanting to understand what makes people tick and how that translates to action.
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